2 hearts

When 2 hearts entwine, the love they share is so devine.
The power of the love will shine on through any darkness that may come there way.

Finding your sole mate is very rare so when it happens its a joy to share.
The love that you have for each other today i prey will grow stronger by the day.

Take these vows and feel the words, dont let them wash over you and pass on by.
A wedding is a blessing for all to see its the start of something specail, just wait and see.
I wish you all the luck in the world, and i hope you will bo together for all eternity.

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by BabyD on Sat, 25/10/2008 - 23:12

*****BabyD*****
I wrote this for my cousins wedding, shes like my sister.
I said it in the church before the vows, instead of a bible reading.
SO this is very special to me.
Thanks for reading it, hope ya like it.

*****BabyD*****

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by Geminni on Sun, 26/10/2008 - 16:47

It is very beautiful...two hearts one soul =)

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by Julianne on Wed, 29/10/2008 - 03:50

Many misspelled words! Try to check on these words in the dictionary (spelling/meaning):
1. devine
2. sole (I don't like to be this!)
3. its (you might mean IT'S)
4. prey (oh, my God!)
5. bo

I think this piece is better said than written. How many readers agree with me???

by Nikoshiana Flowerday on Wed, 29/10/2008 - 09:38

Im sure it was just a typos error shes made by accident.........:O)

by Lost Soul on Wed, 29/10/2008 - 10:35

BabyD...
Nobody is perfect! I agree with Niko. You may not like unsolicited advice like most of us. Neither do I! However, after reading "2 Hearts", I see Julianne's point, though, frankly said. We should know the elements of good poetry. Grammar counts.
I don't want to take sides but, I think Julianne wants you to improve your craft! Frankly speaking, I love the messages in each poem you write. Why not take Julianne's words as a challenge to improve your talent in writing!

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by BabyD on Wed, 05/11/2008 - 16:42

*****BabyD*****

As i said before i write from the heart. I do spell things wrong, and im far from perfect as no one is.
Im sorry if i spell things wrong and that my grammer isnt perfect, and if this spoils it for you also im sorry.
However i suffer from dyslexia and struggle with grammer especailly. This is NOT an excuse but this is how it is. I write for pleasure to express my feelings not as a job etc, and i dont wish to start stressing about things when i enjoy this so very much.
I will however try and check things more throughly before submitting, but i can gaurantee they will most likely always be mistakes.
Thanks for all the lovely commesnt its helps and builds my confidence many thanks.
Donna

*****BabyD*****

by Nikoshiana Flowerday on Sat, 08/11/2008 - 09:43

I think your work is great, and dsylexia is a very common thing, not everyone is perfect as i said and i think youve done a great job interpretting your work despite having a few problems, you havent let it hold you back.. well done to you i say. and i think Julianne should understand this, perhaps before being so critical x

by mvvenkataraman on Sun, 18/09/2011 - 08:40

Your poem is a valuable advice
Those who follow it are wise
You have correctly expressed
Your ideas have impressed.

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